Two for six. (a wink to xxoo)

Posted by Spinkane 11 years, 7 months ago to Entertainment
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You give me love mumps,
and twirling toe.
We have come
a long way to go.
Candy Dot drops,
sugar beet baby.
It’s a stumble spell,
in a tumble bee.
Pitch pine
dark chocolate
and later
moonlight.
Two four six,
sleep knot tight.

Stitch

I’m a sucker for poems, I apologize.
I rationalize posting here with.. I created this! (In all humility)


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  • Posted by khalling 11 years, 7 months ago in reply to this comment.
    I dig. it's been too long since a poetry class, so I'll leave the important ciphering up to the experts. I enjoy how your poems often mix a sense of playfulness with a sense of loss or regret. I also enjoy how you mix up idioms and turn them on their head.
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  • Posted by 11 years, 7 months ago in reply to this comment.
    I get the format, it’s cool, I looked up villanelle before I read the poem. As far as the thrust, I could say Chalice and the blood of Christ but the love Goddess threw me for a curve. It could be a guy drinking some Boones farm out of a Flintstones Jelly jar thinking about his old lady. To me poetry is about emotion as opposed to conveying a specific idea. This poem inspired me with the wonder of wine in the transformation of it from a vine and the “spirit” it holds also the precious metals and gems of its container. Eros suggested a beautiful woman, which entered the imagery (or a dude if you go that way, there’s nothing wrong with that). The ending I had to decide was the “two are one, to one combine” the man/woman or Goblet/wine; I chose the latter. The format worked great. As far as that goes and keeping on topic, what’ll really blow your mind up is:
    Keeping time, time, time,
    In a sort of Runic rhyme,
    To the tintinnabulation that so musically wells
    From the bells, bells, bells, bells,
    Bells, bells, bells -
    From the jingling and the tinkling of the bells.
    Get that poem stuck in your head, Poe was crazy.
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  • Posted by $ johnrobert2 11 years, 7 months ago in reply to this comment.
    That was the original form of the poem. It is a villanelle the most famous of which is Dylan Thomas' 'Do Not Go Gentle Into That Good Night'. Look at the rhyme scheme and you can see why it the most difficult form to write. Also, the first and third lines must repeat is the third line of the following stanzas with them repeating in the last two lines of the final stanza. Do you get the significant thrust of the poem? (Hint: altar)

    I can see two or three possible connotations, the most promising of which is lover who has either died or disappeared with no word or trace. The writer is yearning for what was and , most likely, will never have again.
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  • Posted by $ johnrobert2 11 years, 7 months ago
    Try this villanelle for size:

    This Ancient Rune, This Honored Sign

    This ancient rune, this honored sign
    Signals still to that which seeks
    This living, restful savored wine.

    Often subtly wrought, in fine
    Gold, silver, jewels speaks
    This ancient rune, this honored sign.

    Eros, patron to the wondrous vine
    And fruit from which, winsome peeks
    This living, restful, savored wine.

    When quiet made and bound divine,
    Time seldom mars with weathered streaks
    This ancient rune, this honored sign.

    Drink deeply then and taste define
    Where , in the mind, softly wreaks
    This living, restful, savored wine.

    The two are one, to one combine.
    They are those to which honor speaks.
    This ancient rune, this honored sign;
    This living, restful, savored wine.

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  • Posted by 11 years, 7 months ago in reply to this comment.
    A goblet of wine and the language of love. It’s very mystical the first time through, great imaging.
    Hey! I have a suggestion. Go to file/Options/Proofing/auto correct options/capitalize first letter of sentences. You can turn this off and the poem will read the way you originally wrote it.
    I enjoyed your poem.
    It reminded me of a poem I wrote. You’ll be the first person I’ve shared this poem with, it’s just fun.
    Runic Romance

    I was counting on match sticks
    to show me a sign.
    Deciphering tea leaves and
    Turkish coffee grinds.
    With the outlook uncertain
    in the magic eight
    while the stylus on Ouija
    seemed to hesitate,
    I looked into the mirror,
    mirror on the wall.
    That’s when I was certain
    you didn’t call.

    You didn’t call me baby,
    you didn’t call me back.
    You called the witch doctor,
    about our heart attack.
    If you found your true calling
    about what was meant to be.
    Then I’m lost and I’m falling
    into apathy.

    At the séance, tarot cards
    seemed to suggest
    the specter among us, I
    would never rest.
    I’m hopelessly spellbound
    by your lottery charms.
    It’s hypnotic how I feel
    you right here in my arms.

    I hear you call me baby,
    captured in my trance.
    You’re calling me sweetheart
    in our runic romance.

    Stitch
    Can you dig it?
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