I believe I saw Emily at an Anti Trump rally supporting Antifa, Planned Parenthood and the Me Too movements as they were assaulting those freak Trumpsters.

That was brilliant! Well done!

Did the judges recognize the 'political satire' or did they just think it was reality? I loved it. :-D

I actually went to school with someone who has literally chastised me for some of the things in this story! (She grew up in rural Texas like I did but then moved to Kalifornia.) I could practially hear the questions in your story coming from her voice!

Nice story, and eerily far too familiar. Hope you don't mind me mentioning that you have a typo, which is very minor. You have an extra "s" at the end of the word "racist" in this phrase: "although that is pretty racists of you to assume"

I always wanted to write. Unfortunately, while I'm good at non-fiction, I just don't have story-telling (of any sort) in me.

Kudos to you.

Brava!!!!

And at the same time I weep......

The ending of this 1,000 word stroll through purgatory, maybe unintentionally, left me thinking of the nothingness of the existence of these non-entities. The story ends with no resolution. The people are stuck in a world that can not resolve itself. The hope is that this black hole existence has an event horizon that that one can steer clear of....

A little too close to home. It is actually a horror story. :-)

Funny, I thought your story showed that this faux idea of "Race" etc...does exist in the characters you created...were they not battling with those mental concepts all through the story?

I am serious about the value of your story made into an episode for Black Mirror...it could be made to show the scarier side of this nonsense and it's repercussions...ex...like showing them they are no different than the Nazi's in their "Exclusion" of others, (coming face to face with their own reflections) not to mention, their lack of mental stamina to survive a societal collapse.

Thanks for toughing it out! :)

Reality is weirder than fiction....

Hmm... maybe I should write a dystopian novel from the view point of an millennial liberal-socialist. Although thinking like them for hundreds of pages might drive me off the deep end. :)

I grew up with concern for gender neutral words. But we walked to school together without parents and without great fear. It would be child abuse now, but I got snow in my boot a few blocks from school at age 6. My friends helped me and groused about my having stupidly walked in deep slush. It was fine though. Now the kids, except for mine, walk on those same streets with parents, who see even teenagers as never being out of their sight. The teenagers don't seem to rebel. I'm concerned about this. I teach my kids the same gender-neutral words my parents taught me. They are lucky I don't subject them to Free to Be You and Me, the record most people my age in Madison seem to have had in the 70s.

I am not concerned about the gender and racial safe space. I'm concerned about them being scared to go outside and make basic decisions on their own.

I appreciate the story, but they're not afraid of one thing, e.g. sex and racial stereotypes. They're afraid of everything that someone didn't hold their hand and tell them to do. Reality is weirder than fiction.

I had a tough time reading that, (I felt queezy myself.), wanted to bop them both upside their heads hoping for a reset...oh, forgot... we can't say "Reset" anymore...it's Russian.

Scary as hell, worse than a Horror Film.

Send your script to Neflix's Black Mirror...it would play well.

Nicely done! I found myself chuckling all they way through it, as if it was fiction. Of course we know it's not. I could definitely see this as a novel. I'll buy a copy when completed.

Thank you for reading it!

I actually just got feedback from the judges, and one of the reasons it didn't score higher (I got a 9 out of possible 15) was because "The story hit on practically all hot button issues and groups and went so far as to make it appear that racism and discrimination don't exist."

Actually, the submitted version was toned down. The original draft was far more scathing in regards to the left.

Just read this via a FB conversation, very well done! Creepily close to where the left wants to take us. It like a story that could fit into Fallacies of Vision. Very well done.

Yep, maybe as long as War And Peace.

Thanks for reading! There's so much irrationality in our society right now that it was hard to pick and choose topics and keep this to under 1,001 words. Might have to expand this to a novel....

"I cringe at the sound of my white girl name--" That had me dino laughing for a full five seconds.
What is cringe worthy is that there are libtards who approximate living like that. "Self-made slaves"is a term that just jumped into me tiny dino mind.
Your short story is a very good satire. The ending with a bum who takes credit cards is perfect

Thank you!

Thanks. I'd love that! Share away... :)

Wow. Alex!!! Well done. May I share your story with some friends?