found it -- 1969 prequel of Every Breath You Take

Posted by johnpe1 12 years ago to The Gulch: General
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as previously hinted, 14 years before Sting:::

I Am Watching...

Lover, I am watching you,
for I want to know all of you:
from your smile,
but it's not your smile:
it's a silver-blue sparkle
from behind your eyes,
or two smooth curves,
rising, across your cheeks,
or the curve of your mouth,
bending up, to linear and beyond;
from your body,
but it's not your body:
it's a silver-gold-tan blur of motion,
begun by silver and tan,
by the light behind your eyes,
followed by the drifting-gold afterglow
of your hair streaming after,
or the taut lines of your arms,
converging at that point behind your eyes,
now closed and looking inward,
striving to find the source of that lifelight
of a moment of ecstasy,
and the rising and falling of your breasts,
velvet-textured in the moonlight,
moving in time with your search for the source
and slowing,
as the search ends and the source is known;
these and more, ever more,
whose sum is you,
are the beauties I know as I watch;
I see myself, smiling your smile,
from within me,
moving through the day with you,
slightly ahead, then slightly behind,
then breathing my breaths,
that you may work to breathe yours
while making mine seem impossible to find;
in these ways each of us moves into the other's life;
we learn one another as we learn ourselves,
gaining an added dimension
by reflection, each in the other,
as we live,
alone,
together,
and watching... jpm.28dec69, alone.


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  • Posted by Herb7734 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    Today, what youngsters think of as corny, I consider to be the way it should be. John, you've got it right.
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  • Posted by ObjectiveAnalyst 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    The pleasure was all mine, johnpe1. Thank you. The scene at 1:17 was great. Very heartfelt… great movie. You can't go wrong with John Wayne and Maureen O'Hara. I know how you feel. The Mrs. and I have been together for almost 35 years. I sure hope she outlives me. The alternative would be too much to bear... though the thought of her potential anguish is also distressing. One must live in the here and now and recognize our good fortune while it lasts.
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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    Thank You, O.A.;;; the warm, gentle, powerful
    nature of a man and a woman together, well --
    John Wayne said it well in McLintock ....... "all the
    gold in the u.s. treasury, and all the harp music in
    heaven, can't equal what happens between a man
    and a woman, with all that growin' together." -- j

    p.s. this is found at 1:17 in this youtube::: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Rff9RELy...

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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    my first wife and I Always went to sleep, touching
    one another. second and current (17 years together)
    wife and I hold hands 'til ... -- j

    p.s. corny? nope!

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  • Posted by ObjectiveAnalyst 11 years, 12 months ago
    johnpe1, that was good.... need a cigarette... :)
    "What a piece of work is a man, how noble in reason, how
    infinite in faculties, in form and moving how express and
    admirable, in action how like an angel, in apprehension how like
    a god!" Shakespeare.
    Regards,
    O.A.
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  • Posted by Herb7734 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    Nice.
    A look with a smile, a head on someone's shoulder, "goodnight sweetie." Is it corny and yokel-like? Probably. Just call me Rustic Rufus..
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  • Posted by Herb7734 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    When I was a teen, I went to the Detroit Main Library (Paradise) and went into the forbidden stacks to find books no longer on the shelves. How I discovered the "secret" passage there is the tale for another day.
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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    in music, art, architecture, well, nearly everything,
    there is beauty ... just the caress of a hand can be
    gorgeous ... and we should focus on it more! -- j

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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    that line is from the complement poem "consummation"
    which I will eventually find, here in the "stacks" --
    if you remember how they used to call the back
    rooms at the library....... -- j

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  • Posted by Herb7734 11 years, 12 months ago
    As an alien, watching the human race over the centuries, I see a vicious, bloodthirsty, species that kills, tortures, and inflicts unspeakable acts upon one another. And yet, and yet....
    Is capable of creating such beauty in all the arts. Even their buildings and vehicles strive for beauty. They are a puzzle within an enigma. They have the power to reason, they have volition, and yet billions of them prefer horror to beauty, war to peace, irrationality to reason.
    They are magnificent and malevolent. If you can read the above and not be touched, there is something missing within.
    In the words of the King of Siam, "'Tis a puzzlement."
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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    Thank You.

    the indented version is in the "general" section,
    entitled "Watching..." -- j
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  • Posted by Herb7734 11 years, 12 months ago
    Holy S.....!
    I'm very old, but I gotta say, reading that...well, I'm going to have a conversation with the wife. After 59 years together, we still make that trip that lovers write about as above. Is it hot in here?
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  • Posted by $ Snezzy 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    Some websites do that. Yahoo Answers is notorious for how it ruins examples of Python code, where (unlike most other computer languages) the indenting is syntactically significant.

    "It's not a bug, it's a feature!"
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  • Posted by 11 years, 12 months ago in reply to this comment.
    I should first have said Thank You ... I'm warped
    by having found it, I guess. -- j

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  • Posted by 12 years ago in reply to this comment.
    I posted it again, in "general," titled "Watching..."
    and fixed the indents with a trick. -- j

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  • Posted by 12 years ago in reply to this comment.
    this was written 16 months after I ... entered the
    world of lovemaking ... and 20 months before
    I was married the first time. odd, but the memories
    have not faded about those days -- very special. -- j

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  • Posted by khalling 12 years ago
    it isbeautiful. not the same as Every Breath I take. it's actually...better...keep writing..
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  • Posted by 12 years ago
    p.s. all of the subordinate lines are indented
    in the original, starting with "but it's not your smile" ...
    this thing forgot my indents. -- j

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